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So, to recap....which means go over again, post your story here after you've done some in class editing with your peers and then post it online for the world to see. The other people who are part of your team online, will post 2 stars (positive things) and one wish (constructive feedback to help make the story better). Be kind, because after all, they will do the same for you!
This is my mystery story by erkyperky08
A Spooky Mystery
“Oh my gosh you scared me Brooklyn.” shouted Tiffany, “OK you know the deal Brooklyn its a dollar a mystery so pay up.” “All right I will give you the dollar after I tell you what the mystery is,” Brooklyn exclaimed, “You know that old haunted house on the end of main street, well I saw something looking out the window.” “I will get right on that, now pay up,” answered Tiffany.
Later on Tiffany and Brooklyn went down to the end of main street to have a look at the old rickety house that looked like it was going to fall over pretty soon. Brooklyn tried to turn around and go back, but Tiffany saw her and told her that there was no way of getting out of tis one. Brooklyn was coming along to stay outside in case Tiffany couldn't make it out because old houses are just kind of like that sometimes. Tiffany was starting to feel a little nervous because she has seen to many horror and mystery movies to last a life time and shes only 13 years old.
They asked each other if their walkie talkies were and they both gave each other a thumbs so Tiffany went up to the door step. When she approached the first step the door just all of a sudden flung open and made Tiffany jump, then the door shut right behind her. As she walked through the door she was thinking about the couch and TV in her nice air conditioned house, but she knew that her business depends on her.
As Tiffany walk down the long hall her legs were shaking at the speed of 20km/h. She came up to the kitchen to have a look around, but she saw nothing. She thought about where Brooklyn saw the ghost so she ran back to the door to ask Brooklyn but the door wouldn't open. Tiffany was trying to call for help but the door was to thick for anyone to hear her on the other side.
Well Tiffany was smart enough to figure out that she wasn't going to get out this way. So Tiffany sat down and thought about all the horror and mystery movies that she has seen and how they would get out of it. Then she thought of this one movie that they found a trap door to get out of the haunted house. Tiffany started looking around for a trap door, but couldn't find one. All of a sudden a book shelf turned around to the outside of the house.
There was Brooklyn standing there waiting for me to come out and give her some good news, but I had no good news. All of a sudden I thought of something, when I was looking for the trap door I saw something and I think it was a mannequin. So I told her that the ghost she saw was a mannequin not a ghost. After that Brooklyn was not afraid to walk past the house on the end of main street. For me, my business is still up and running. And that was the last time Brooklyn came to me for a ghost mystery.
One evening as Sydney, Sui and Lillie walked to the Hanna Primary school for dance class Sydney said, “Hey guys I didn't practice at all!”
Lillie replied, “Haha I didn't either!”
Sui said “You did not practice Katie is going to be really mad!”
“And what you did?”
“Ummm actually I did!” yelped Sui right back
They got to the school took there boots off and headed up stairs! “Hey girls your late hustle up we have been waiting forever!” They quickly ran in the studio got there tap shoes on and shuffled away.
The song they danced to was Operator by Shiloh Montez. “Now girls we are going to do the solos now, yelled Katie. Solos are when you do the whole dance by yourself to prove if your good enough to go to festivals, so you don't pull the group down at competitions
I volunteered to go first. I went and did my thing and then Rochelle went. She was the “I am no gonna talk to anybody” type she did fine. Then Sui went, she stumbled and fumbled. Sydney, she was probably the worst dancer in the whole class because she thought about it to hard. Lillie wen next, I have nothing to say about her!
“Sydney, Sui and Lillie can I talk to you please,” asked Katie. I couldn't hear what they said but when the 3 of them came marching out I could tell they weren't happy! Everyone asked, “whats wrong?”
“We failed O.K and were not going to Brooks this weekend!”
“Well todays Brooks festival and I am ready to kick some snooty booty!” I saw Katie rummaging through everything in the studio. “Girls I don know if we are going!”
cried Katie, “Why not?”
“Well the i-pod and costumes got stolen or misplaced last night!” “And I don't no who did it.” I had a flashback. “We failed and we are not going.” As I was walking back to my house I saw a flash of bright colors and very pink sparkles. Was it them... could it be... the costumes. It was the three, Sydney, Sui and Lillie practicing the dance. Rocking out to the i-pod. “Hey give that back its Katie's!” They shook there heads no. I remember now Katie's i-pod was orange not red.
Solve It As I was walking back to tell Katie what had happened Rochelle was rocking out to an Orange i-pod exactly like Katie's. As I miserably walked passed her she had the costumes hanging out of her back pack. “Please Rochelle I know thats Katie's stuff.” She handed it to me and ran. I ran back gave the stuff the Katie and we won GOLD!
The Lost Kittens By Firethrout2010
Early one spring morning as Bo-Jingles was walking along on the sidewalk to my house, he passed by Box Man, La-La, and Lacey. He noticed that they were fatter than usual. “Hey! What are you guys doing?” asked Bo-Jingles. “Just taking a walk! See ya!”, replied Box Man in a rush. Bo-Jingles thought it was strange that they went by him so quickly. Box Man, Lacey and La-La were always up to something. “AHHHHHHHH!”, I screamed. My kittens were missing! I was frantic. Where could they be? Did they get out the back door? Did a hawk swoop down from the sky and carry them away? Without my kittens, my life would be boring. All of a sudden, Bo-Jingles came barging into my house. “What's the matter? he shrieked gaining his breath. “My kittens are missing!” I sobbed. “When is the last time you saw them?” “They were here this morning and now they're gone,” I replied. “I played with them, fed them and I only turned my back for a moment. I went to get a snack for myself. Then I came back to their cage and... they were gone! What in the world am I going to do?”.
“I think I have an idea about where your kittens might be”. Bo-jingles said mysteriously. Bo-jingles went over to box man's house and asked “hey did you see the kittens.” Box Man said “I do not know about some stolen kittens.”
Try to solve the mystery It was Box Man and his gang, because he said stolen kittens.
Welcome to Your Mystery Story Page! This is the sweet spot to post your best effort at writing a mystery! This is also the place to post two stars and a wish about the other stories you read. Two stars are positive things you see in the story and your wish is constructive feedback on how to specifically improve the story.
So, to recap....which means go over again, post your story here after you've done some in class editing with your peers and then post it online for the world to see. The other people who are part of your team online, will post 2 stars (positive things) and one wish (constructive feedback to help make the story better). Be kind, because after all, they will do the same for you!
This is my mystery story by erkyperky08
A Spooky Mystery
“Oh my gosh you scared me Brooklyn.” shouted Tiffany, “OK you know the deal Brooklyn its a dollar a mystery so pay up.” “All right I will give you the dollar after I tell you what the mystery is,” Brooklyn exclaimed, “You know that old haunted house on the end of main street, well I saw something looking out the window.” “I will get right on that, now pay up,” answered Tiffany.
Later on Tiffany and Brooklyn went down to the end of main street to have a look at the old rickety house that looked like it was going to fall over pretty soon. Brooklyn tried to turn around and go back, but Tiffany saw her and told her that there was no way of getting out of tis one. Brooklyn was coming along to stay outside in case Tiffany couldn't make it out because old houses are just kind of like that sometimes. Tiffany was starting to feel a little nervous because she has seen to many horror and mystery movies to last a life time and shes only 13 years old.
They asked each other if their walkie talkies were and they both gave each other a thumbs so Tiffany went up to the door step. When she approached the first step the door just all of a sudden flung open and made Tiffany jump, then the door shut right behind her. As she walked through the door she was thinking about the couch and TV in her nice air conditioned house, but she knew that her business depends on her.
As Tiffany walk down the long hall her legs were shaking at the speed of 20km/h. She came up to the kitchen to have a look around, but she saw nothing. She thought about where Brooklyn saw the ghost so she ran back to the door to ask Brooklyn but the door wouldn't open. Tiffany was trying to call for help but the door was to thick for anyone to hear her on the other side.
Well Tiffany was smart enough to figure out that she wasn't going to get out this way. So Tiffany sat down and thought about all the horror and mystery movies that she has seen and how they would get out of it. Then she thought of this one movie that they found a trap door to get out of the haunted house. Tiffany started looking around for a trap door, but couldn't find one. All of a sudden a book shelf turned around to the outside of the house.
There was Brooklyn standing there waiting for me to come out and give her some good news, but I had no good news. All of a sudden I thought of something, when I was looking for the trap door I saw something and I think it was a mannequin. So I told her that the ghost she saw was a mannequin not a ghost. After that Brooklyn was not afraid to walk past the house on the end of main street. For me, my business is still up and running. And that was the last time Brooklyn came to me for a ghost mystery.
Dance
By: Jubejube2010
One evening as Sydney, Sui and Lillie walked to the Hanna Primary school for dance class Sydney said, “Hey guys I didn't practice at all!”
Lillie replied, “Haha I didn't either!”
Sui said “You did not practice Katie is going to be really mad!”
“And what you did?”
“Ummm actually I did!” yelped Sui right back
They got to the school took there boots off and headed up stairs! “Hey girls your late hustle up we have been waiting forever!” They quickly ran in the studio got there tap shoes on and shuffled away.
The song they danced to was Operator by Shiloh Montez. “Now girls we are going to do the solos now, yelled Katie. Solos are when you do the whole dance by yourself to prove if your good enough to go to festivals, so you don't pull the group down at competitions
I volunteered to go first. I went and did my thing and then Rochelle went. She was the “I am no gonna talk to anybody” type she did fine. Then Sui went, she stumbled and fumbled. Sydney, she was probably the worst dancer in the whole class because she thought about it to hard. Lillie wen next, I have nothing to say about her!
“Sydney, Sui and Lillie can I talk to you please,” asked Katie. I couldn't hear what they said but when the 3 of them came marching out I could tell they weren't happy! Everyone asked, “whats wrong?”
“We failed O.K and were not going to Brooks this weekend!”
“Well todays Brooks festival and I am ready to kick some snooty booty!” I saw Katie rummaging through everything in the studio. “Girls I don know if we are going!”
cried Katie, “Why not?”
“Well the i-pod and costumes got stolen or misplaced last night!” “And I don't no who did it.” I had a flashback. “We failed and we are not going.” As I was walking back to my house I saw a flash of bright colors and very pink sparkles. Was it them... could it be... the costumes. It was the three, Sydney, Sui and Lillie practicing the dance. Rocking out to the i-pod. “Hey give that back its Katie's!” They shook there heads no. I remember now Katie's i-pod was orange not red.
Solve It
As I was walking back to tell Katie what had happened Rochelle was rocking out to an Orange i-pod exactly like Katie's. As I miserably walked passed her she had the costumes hanging out of her back pack. “Please Rochelle I know thats Katie's stuff.” She handed it to me and ran. I ran back gave the stuff the Katie and we won GOLD!
The Lost Kittens
By Firethrout2010
Early one spring morning as Bo-Jingles was walking along on the sidewalk to my house, he passed by Box Man, La-La, and Lacey. He noticed that they were fatter than usual.
“Hey! What are you guys doing?” asked Bo-Jingles.
“Just taking a walk! See ya!”, replied Box Man in a rush. Bo-Jingles thought it was strange that they went by him so quickly. Box Man, Lacey and La-La were always up to something.
“AHHHHHHHH!”, I screamed. My kittens were missing! I was frantic. Where could they be? Did they get out the back door? Did a hawk swoop down from the sky and carry them away? Without my kittens, my life would be boring.
All of a sudden, Bo-Jingles came barging into my house.
“What's the matter? he shrieked gaining his breath.
“My kittens are missing!” I sobbed.
“When is the last time you saw them?”
“They were here this morning and now they're gone,” I replied. “I played with them, fed them and I only turned my back for a moment. I went to get a snack for myself. Then I came back to their cage and... they were gone! What in the world am I going to do?”.
“I think I have an idea about where your kittens might be”. Bo-jingles said mysteriously.
Bo-jingles went over to box man's house and asked “hey did you see the kittens.”
Box Man said “I do not know about some stolen kittens.”
Try to solve the mystery
It was Box Man and his gang, because he said stolen kittens.